I would like to thank everyone for helping me with my essay on Thursday. It really helped and I have a much better idea of how to write it.
Many of you commented that I drift from the prompt in my second and third paragraphs because I get off the subject of the actual concert and begin trying to persuade my reader of why classical music is great. I have changed around both of these paragraphs so that I stick to the event and instead I elaborate on what made the pieces that were played really great.
Also, in the paragraph about Linda Wang I go more in depth to explain why her playing was so effective and also why it is so popular. I also added a bit more about why the concert hall she played in was so appealing. Let me know if anyone as any other comments!
Thanks again.
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Thanks, Kate, for your reflection on the workshop. I'm glad it was helpful for you. Once you're done with this revision (it sounds like you may already be), feel free to email to me, so I can give you more detailed feedback. After this second revision, I'll post it to our DenveRhetor site.
ReplyDeleteTHanks!--Geoffrey